Hello all! Yesterday, I finished a project, which was a reboot of Green Blood and Coils of Hate, both by Mark Smith. I have now completed it. It is called Ravages of Hate. You can get it here:
https://drive.google.com/file/d/1OFy8EsspwBRdXT_dcQt1rVVzVl77jriF/view?usp=drive_link
Any playtesting feedback would be welcome! Many thanks!
What an epic undertaking. Well done, Stuart. I look forward to reading it -- I always liked the story and characters in Coils of Hate in particular.
ReplyDeleteMany thanks, Dave! Many thanks for the great idea of combining them. I've kept the characters in Coils of Hate pretty much the same for the same reason as you.
DeleteFreaking amazing. I never knew about the tool either. Downloading it now. Perfect timing as I'm jumping back into T&T/M!M!/?? authoring.
ReplyDeleteThats one hell of an effort! Congratulations!
ReplyDeleteNow should you need a graphic design to make a bound book of you work please do reach out!
This is amazing just found it. Can't wait to read it. Thank you very much.
ReplyDeleteSo far the main issue is with some of the word choice not flowing as well as it could. Easily fixable if you try reading the passages out loud: if they're a bit awkward to speak, tighten them up until they roll off the tongue. I use this trick all the time on my own projects.
ReplyDeleteJust as an example, "When you did, they told you that you were what was wrong" could flow smoother if it's shortened to "When you did, they said that YOU were what was wrong", or maybe even simply, "They said that YOU were what was wrong."
You ever have guest posts by other authors? I was going to write an article for my own blog about the process I use to write the Dinah-Mite gamebooks, but it might make for a good guest post since you clearly have a community of people interested in the genre and my own blog is still trying to get off the ground. I'm working on the second book and the system I'm using really helps me organize gamebook chapters without the use of an external app. Of course, it might just make sense to me, and you guys might find it silly. Who knows?
I can send you a free copy of my book too, if you want another gamebook to add to your reading list. It's not as involved as yours, but it has replay value at least.
Good point, many thanks. And welcome to the gamebook blogosphere. I do accept guest posts as I would love to have regular posts, but I don't have time for posts at the moment. Email me at sl1605@gmail.com. I would also love to see your book.
DeleteHi there Stuart.
ReplyDeleteThis is a review of your work:
https://elrefugioseguro.wordpress.com/2023/08/31/los-estragos-del-odio/
Kind regards
Roleander
Sweet: there's an English version too for ignorant monolingual Americans like me...
DeleteThis is cool! Is there an english version?
DeleteMany thanks!!!!
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